Hello Ally,
This is an amazing, blunt, and personal post, so thank you for sharing it. Your use of language is powerful, gets the message across effectively and succinctly; and I really appreciate your sarcastic rhetorical questions. It just strengthens your entire post!
I also like how you “hit the nail on the head”, and do not go “beating around the bush”. Yet when you use figurative language in this line: “This concealment fuels an undercurrent of racism that continues to poison society and persecute people for their ethnicity”, it is so beautifully constructed, the diction used is so effective, I think it is like a “reality punch”.
While your post could have been more formal (in terms of language, such as “university”, instead of “uni”), and use capital letters where needed (for example, “Master’s Degree”), I honestly would like to thank you for sharing such a meaningful and strong post.
Kindest regards,
Vanessa.
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