Blake, this creative piece has the potential to become a really good extract of a Realist novel. However, there are a few misspellings, incorrect use of punctuation, and perhaps a confusion with words, such as “reigns” when it should be “reins”; and they jar the fluidity of the story.
Yet on a happier note, your writing still has quite a strong impact on me, because once again, your selective diction has produced a powerful effect, particularly the phrase: “shook his core”. I like how you present the idea that Nature has the ability to communicate with humans through animals and the environment.
And though your closing line is stereotypical, I still find it a pleasant ending, because it encapsulates the emotional connection the character has with his surroundings. Well done, and thank you for giving me another glimpse of your creativity and potential!
The World and "Eye" 